Wednesday, January 17, 2007

poetry thursday: one line's a given

At the poetry thursday website this week we're writing a poem incorporating a line from someone else's poem. A special thank you to the poet at beloved dreamer for sharing the inspiration of this one evocative line:

sound a sound so sweet it wraps around my heart


and this is where it went

acoustic traffic jam numbs my ears
the mayhem muddles my nerves
but a silence summoned and sustained can
sound a sound so sweet it wraps around my heart
it hums away my thoughts and taps my fears apart
easy rhythm calmly rocking
rest notes bring me ease


20 comments:

Unknown said...

Nice, Megan. I like what you did with that line. It's really fun to see what others do with the same inspiration you used.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Lovely! The lovely sweet inner song that can block out the trafficsounds....

Rethabile said...

Nice, DIT. Cheers

White Square said...

Hi,
Very well tried...the poem becomes real with the mention of the traffic and the mayhem..
I read another such realistic poem today by Crafty Green Poet titled Verbal...about locks..
Cheers!

White Square said...

Hi ,
Its abhay K again
the poem is Verbal- I can't lock the front door by Michelle Fry

GreenishLady said...

What a perfect use of the line! I love the peace in the entire poem. Lovely.

T.M.K. said...

excellent use of the line. very involved, brings the reader to the moment of stillness that turns the mundane to the sacred.

Deb said...

I like you poem a great deal. (Part of that is that I am kind of sound sensative) I appreciated all the language cues and where you went with it.

Really well done. I want to read it over and over. May I make a copy of it?

Anonymous said...

Hi Megan,

Thanks for coming by and commenting on the poem I wrote for you. Your line at least. :)

I like your poem here and the soothing sounds so sweet.

Sassy Dewy

xo

megan said...

reply to deb: yes, please have a copy for yourself...enjoy!

Pauline said...

the ending line is perfect!

Unknown said...

This is so great - you've done such a good job incorporating sound into the poem, as that borrowed line calls for. So far today everyone who has picked this line has rocked it...you included!

Mother of Invention said...

I love "silence summoned and sustained"..very effective alliteration.

What a great poetry Thurs. idea.
Could be called, "Whose Line Is it Anyway?"!!!

twilightspider said...

Very nice! I really love the line "but a silence summoned and sustained" The alliteration is so effortless and works so well.

Jim Brock said...

First, thanks for allowing your line to be stolen, as I took advantage of it.

Second, what verbal dexterity here!

Anonymous said...

Love the use of sound in your poem. Well done!

Anonymous said...

Also, I used your line "resting in a clean white bowl" in my poem, Call Me Destructive. Hope you like it. Thanks.

Jessica said...

lovely city imagery -- I like that the discordant sounds are the sweet sounds.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Funny how different that line was used in some poems I have read and am still reading. It was lovely. Starting out tense and then ending with a mere whisper. Wonderful poem and thanks for using my line.

Unknown said...

I really like this one. Good work.