At the poetry thursday website this week we're writing a poem incorporating a line from someone else's poem. A special thank you to the poet at beloved dreamer for sharing the inspiration of this one evocative line:
sound a sound so sweet it wraps around my heart
and this is where it went
acoustic traffic jam numbs my ears
the mayhem muddles my nerves
but a silence summoned and sustained can
sound a sound so sweet it wraps around my heart
it hums away my thoughts and taps my fears apart
easy rhythm calmly rocking
rest notes bring me ease
20 comments:
Nice, Megan. I like what you did with that line. It's really fun to see what others do with the same inspiration you used.
Lovely! The lovely sweet inner song that can block out the trafficsounds....
Nice, DIT. Cheers
Hi,
Very well tried...the poem becomes real with the mention of the traffic and the mayhem..
I read another such realistic poem today by Crafty Green Poet titled Verbal...about locks..
Cheers!
Hi ,
Its abhay K again
the poem is Verbal- I can't lock the front door by Michelle Fry
What a perfect use of the line! I love the peace in the entire poem. Lovely.
excellent use of the line. very involved, brings the reader to the moment of stillness that turns the mundane to the sacred.
I like you poem a great deal. (Part of that is that I am kind of sound sensative) I appreciated all the language cues and where you went with it.
Really well done. I want to read it over and over. May I make a copy of it?
Hi Megan,
Thanks for coming by and commenting on the poem I wrote for you. Your line at least. :)
I like your poem here and the soothing sounds so sweet.
Sassy Dewy
xo
reply to deb: yes, please have a copy for yourself...enjoy!
the ending line is perfect!
This is so great - you've done such a good job incorporating sound into the poem, as that borrowed line calls for. So far today everyone who has picked this line has rocked it...you included!
I love "silence summoned and sustained"..very effective alliteration.
What a great poetry Thurs. idea.
Could be called, "Whose Line Is it Anyway?"!!!
Very nice! I really love the line "but a silence summoned and sustained" The alliteration is so effortless and works so well.
First, thanks for allowing your line to be stolen, as I took advantage of it.
Second, what verbal dexterity here!
Love the use of sound in your poem. Well done!
Also, I used your line "resting in a clean white bowl" in my poem, Call Me Destructive. Hope you like it. Thanks.
lovely city imagery -- I like that the discordant sounds are the sweet sounds.
Funny how different that line was used in some poems I have read and am still reading. It was lovely. Starting out tense and then ending with a mere whisper. Wonderful poem and thanks for using my line.
I really like this one. Good work.
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